tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-118659272049199363.post4496094244311192611..comments2023-05-11T03:24:28.125-06:00Comments on A Fallacious Comedy: Interlude Thursday: First new draft.Not the Herohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01560658711479024512noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-118659272049199363.post-78781080884818082042011-09-04T14:51:18.448-06:002011-09-04T14:51:18.448-06:00Hey, sorry it's taken me so long to get around...Hey, sorry it's taken me so long to get around to commenting on this. I totally don't agree with everyone on the photos (#24 is my favourite, by a mile), so I may not be representing the majority in my comments, and I'm English, and we tend towards understatement, but with those caveats in place:<br /><br />I wouldn't put 'I'm not your average guy' - that should be implied in what you write afterwards, there shouldn't be any need to state it outright.<br /><br />I would describe your SOH as 'twisted and sarcastic' but not dark. Dark puts me off.<br /><br />I agree with Maxwell's comments on the next two paras. I also agree with the others that the para with Chewbacca etc in it is good.<br /><br />I like the 'my favourite things' section.<br /><br />I like the Pratchett quote, but personally I wouldn't attribute it (or mention death at this point). You could end with a 'and if you know who said that, or you'd like to find out, then msg me...' <br /><br />Anyway, those are my thoughts, for what they're worth...Little Miss Daydreamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10639651765259891602noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-118659272049199363.post-42998538694051646492011-09-02T04:05:04.697-06:002011-09-02T04:05:04.697-06:00Seems like a pretty good dating profile to me. Of ...Seems like a pretty good dating profile to me. Of course, I don't have the right to evaluate, since MY dating profile would mostly be along the lines of:<br /><br />"Hi, I'm Jessica, and I like guys with abs."themajesstyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17263105588818347500noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-118659272049199363.post-79221448403269016932011-09-01T18:07:07.675-06:002011-09-01T18:07:07.675-06:00Love the changes. I hope they work for you and bri...Love the changes. I hope they work for you and bring you some better results. You did great at the edit!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-118659272049199363.post-16493056578342423332011-09-01T15:46:37.387-06:002011-09-01T15:46:37.387-06:00I think the specific reference to movies, historic...I think the specific reference to movies, historic figures, quotes, beer are good. Also, if not specific, the items that show off a sense of humor definitely add to it. <br /><br />To be honest, I don't think the other aspects do you justice. Only found it recently but may be spoiled through the blog. <br /><br />If it feels like it could be transposed to any other profile, then I'd probably change it a bit cuz you tend to write a lot of good sh*t. That's my two cents.ipenkahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16836090393033706793noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-118659272049199363.post-84012666846899189532011-09-01T14:55:08.020-06:002011-09-01T14:55:08.020-06:00Personally, I don't see anything wrong with li...Personally, I don't see anything wrong with listing strippers first. It just shows you are in tune with your desires...A natural part of being human! Just don't combine strippers with chewbacca!<br /><br />And now I have a sudden craving for pb&j!Workingdanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00431559781969929972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-118659272049199363.post-26379186453427012692011-09-01T13:57:48.858-06:002011-09-01T13:57:48.858-06:00I agree with Maxwell, I thought the same when you ...I agree with Maxwell, I thought the same when you said strippers first of all! <br />The chewbacca part was funny and that got me laughing! <br />I could pick out a couple of things but that is just being picky! It is good and I can see more NTH this time too : ) <br /><br />Not easy is it!Sophiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13065108294902440635noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-118659272049199363.post-26577954672376922912011-09-01T13:19:12.114-06:002011-09-01T13:19:12.114-06:00I liked the pb&j analogy. (or maybe I just lik...I liked the pb&j analogy. (or maybe I just like pb&j?)<br /><br />anyway... I'll keep my fingers crossed you start attracting the normal POF folk. Rumour has it there are a few out there.Andreahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04013708241574298467noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-118659272049199363.post-47040681700739044492011-09-01T13:02:07.834-06:002011-09-01T13:02:07.834-06:00The two things I see are that you should reorder t...The two things I see are that you should reorder the theatre line so that "strippers" isn't the first thing, and maybe add in some third thing to the "what you'll laugh at" line. Something like "a skateboarder missing a trick and breaking his nose on the ground" or something.<br /><br />And the Chewbacca line had me laughing.Maxwellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13347298963669062917noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-118659272049199363.post-31580144286239935492011-09-01T12:29:19.453-06:002011-09-01T12:29:19.453-06:00If anything, you're going to end up with a hai...If anything, you're going to end up with a hairy Eastern European woman saying "So I hear you want a chewbacca??"Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02993699573170596587noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-118659272049199363.post-34683299178039538302011-09-01T12:26:00.234-06:002011-09-01T12:26:00.234-06:00Much better! Star Wars reference was appropriate, ...Much better! Star Wars reference was appropriate, not a Luke/Leia incest faux pas. And the pbj line was Homer Simpson-esque. Well done! ~Natasha.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com